After Yes
What comes after saying yes is how although I go to why more often did I do the right thing is there a right thing did I really want blue the green was pretty will I be able to make the payments provide the upkeep make sure my investment is sound should I have said let me think about it some more maybe yes but not now what if it doesn't hold up or what if I believed what wasn't true. Does it get the promised mileage give me comfort meet my needs was it worth what I paid and will pay and how will I deal with it when the term of yes ages and comes to an end and it was everything I hoped and now I am without it broken and alone and older.
Ann Thornfield-Long
Ann Thornfield-Long has work in Artemis Journal, Pine Mountain Sand & Gravel, Riddled with Arrows and Still: The Journal, among others. She's a member of Chattanooga Writers Guild, Poetry Society of Tennessee and previously worked in the medical field and as an EMS volunteer. She is working on a novel and her first collection of poetry.
Comments
Good work, Annie! I can sense the "rushed-ness" leaving no time to think as the narrator is bombarded with doubt skillfully accomplished by not punctuating.
I get a solid sense of the anguish of indecision, or the pain of second guessing a decision, something we've all probably done at one time or another. This sense comes not just from the words themselves, but how they are woven together in what might be called a rush of emotions. Nicely, done, Ann. Thank you.